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Post by Greystar on Thu Aug 14, 2008 8:39 pm

This is an attempt at non-fiction that I might just fail...
According to High School, I've Now Killed Myself

Do, Don't Try

Take a deep breath, Sam,
I think to myself as I peer cautiously over the edge. My feet are planted firmly into the flimsy blue board that is the only thing protecting me from the shockingly blue and pure water below. It's way too flat. I can't do this. I'm going to break my neck. Why is this required for the swim team, anyway?
"Samantha!" The shrill voice of the coach carries up to me from below the diving board. I look down, and gulp instantaneously. There must be at least a hundred rungs until the bottom. Six inches per rung. I try to do the math in my head, but the pressure of the forthcoming jump jumbled everything inside my mind into a tangle of unintelligible thoughts. I tell myself that it's only ten feet, hardly high at all. And then I jump.

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Post by Alexander on Sun Aug 17, 2008 3:29 pm

I like it, though I was never much for non-fiction, but what the heck it was good.

This beginning is very good because really it all needs to start out as an attempt as a book in general, and it just goes well with the title. I really would like to see more out of this Grey!

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